In some countries,owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be case? Do you think this a positive or negative situation?
Owning
home
has Add an article
a home
been
becoming increasingly recent years. Unnecessary verb
apply
Although
i
think that it Change the capitalization
I
consist
of some Change the verb form
consists
obivious
harmful Correct your spelling
obvious
effct
, Correct your spelling
effects
i
strongly Change the capitalization
I
beleive
thatCorrect your spelling
believe
Correct article usage
the
positive
of owning Fix the agreement mistake
positives
house
can outweigh Add an article
a house
the
Correct article usage
apply
renting
home.
On the one hand, why Change the form of the verb
rented
Add a missing verb
do pepole
pepole
think that we buy a new Correct your spelling
people
house
.
First of all, Change the punctuation
?
now a days
home Correct the word
nowadays
rent
is incresing graduallay
Correct your spelling
increasing gradually
due to
the economic crisis. For example
, house
rent
in colombo
which was the 2000rs before Change the capitalization
Colombo
corona
pandemic is as 40000rs recently.Replace the word
the coronavirus
secondly
, if buy a new house
by
cash or Change preposition
with
loan
,when we Correct article usage
a loan
will
sell Verb problem
apply
this
house
,this
Correct determiner usage
the
purchased
price will Replace the word
purchase
be
increase in future and we can get Unnecessary verb
apply
profit
.
Correct article usage
a profit
On the other hand
, some pepole
live in Correct your spelling
people
rent
houses Replace the word
rented
beacause
we can advantages Correct your spelling
because
than own
Change preposition
over owning
house
.Correct article usage
a house
firstly
we can be at our favourite place and easy to move other
places Change preposition
to other
depend
on their business places.Wrong verb form
depending
secondlyspending
Correct your spelling
Secondly
money
Correct article usage
the money
for
Change preposition
on
rent
house
is lower than own
Wrong verb form
owning
house
Correct article usage
a house
in
Change preposition
for
whole
life. Correct pronoun usage
one whole
Finally
we can get Add a comma
Finally,
lot
of Add an article
a lot
facilties
than own Correct your spelling
facilities
place
Change the noun form
places
such
as water'electricity
,Correct your spelling
water electricity
hospital
and education.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
eventhoungh
Correct your spelling
even though
rented
Correct article usage
a rented
house
give
some advantages, Change the verb form
gives
own
Correct pronoun usage
our own
house
best
for our future and my sons and Add a missing verb
is best
daunghter
.Correct your spelling
daughters
daughter
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Word Count
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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.