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the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison. wrtie at least 150 words.

The provided pie charts offer insights into the age distribution of Yemen and Italy's populations in 2000,
as well as
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 projections for 2050. In 2000, Yemen's population was predominantly composed of
individuals
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 aged 0-14
years
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 (50.1%), followed by those aged 15-59
years
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 (46.3%), and
lastly
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,
individuals
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 aged 60 and above (3.6%).
Conversely
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, Italy's population in 2000 was mainly comprised of
individuals
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 aged 15-59
years
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 (61.6%), followed by those aged 60 and above (24.1%), and
lastly
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,
individuals
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 aged 0-14
years
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 (14.3%). Looking ahead to the projection for 2050, Yemen's population is anticipated to see a decrease in the
percentage
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 of
individuals
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 aged 0-14
years
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 to 37%,
while
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 the
percentage
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 of those aged 15-59
years
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 is projected to increase to 57.3%, and the
percentage
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 of
individuals
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 aged 60 and above is expected to rise to 5.7%.
Similarly
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, Italy's projection for 2050 indicates a decrease in the
percentage
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 of
individuals
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 aged 0-14
years
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 to 11.5%, with an increase in the
percentage
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 of those aged 15-59
years
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 to 61.6%, and a notable increase in the
percentage
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 of
individuals
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 aged 60 and above to 42.3%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words individuals, years, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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