More people are stressed today than ever before. What are the causes of this stress? What can be done to address this problem?

#people #stress #address

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Sandesh

Use synonyms

is a problem solver with excellent analytical abilities and critical thinking. There have been numerous occasions when

Sandesh

Use synonyms

came up with remarkable ideas to overcome project stagnation or explain observed phenomena.

For instance

Linking Words

, during testing, reading a single signal value at each measurement location consistently produced erroneous localization results. The accuracy significantly improved when multiple values were read and their mean was used for computation. Though

this

Linking Words

improvement seemed axiomatic, the actual reason eluded us. The following day,

Sandesh

Use synonyms

proposed

modeling

Change the spelling

modelling

show examples

signal noises as Gaussian, where adding them together would approach their mean value, i.e., zero, thereby enhancing accuracy. That was simply brilliant!

Moreover

Linking Words

, he is a meticulous, disciplined, devoted and resilient researcher. He sought to find reasons even for slight fluctuations in a curve or aberrations in data. Despite living an hour away from the campus, he often worked till late hours, either

Change preposition

show examples

the lab fixing UAS after a heartbreaking crash, or on the campus ground setting up data points under flashlights for the next early morning test.

This

Linking Words

attitude will lend him very well as he embarks on an intensive graduate study.

Sandesh

Use synonyms

has sufficient communication skills both written and oral, or formal and informal. He frequently visited my office to update his progress or seek guidance. Never in

this

Linking Words

journey did I feel that we were lacking enough communication. His final thesis report was written to a high standard, and he was among the best presenters in the

defense

Change the spelling

defence

show examples

articulately speaking with complete clarity of

thoughts

Fix the agreement mistake

thought

show examples

, and adeptly answering all the raised questions. Currently, he is working on a manuscript for a journal which we are hopeful of publication. He was

also

Linking Words

actively engaged in outreach activities. He sought and received support from Calcgen Nepal and Prokura Innovations, the start-ups working on drones in Nepal.

Furthermore

Linking Words

, he

also

Linking Words

proactively reached and presented a proposal to

Nepal

Correct article usage

the Nepal

show examples

Academy of Science and Technology (NAST) for funding under the program ‘Young Scientist Grant’ to continue working on it after his graduation. Despite the positive developments, the program was unfortunately scrapped citing insufficient funds from the government.

Finally

Linking Words

Sandesh

Use synonyms

also

Linking Words

a delightful individual to be around. A great storyteller, an amateur sportsperson, musician and singer, he

had

Wrong verb form

has

show examples

always enriched the vibrancy and the diversity of his community at our campus and I believe that he will carry it to his graduate school.

Sandesh

Use synonyms

envisions his future in research and academia. With acceptance to your graduate program, he will be a step closer. I am extremely pleased to help him move forward in life

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

and offer my strongest recommendation with full confidence in his ability to succeed. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any

further

Linking Words

questions or require additional information.

Submitted by swikritishrestha90 on Sun Dec 03 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion

The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion which are essential for structuring the argument effectively. Ensure that your essay begins with a brief introduction of the topic, followed by body paragraphs that support your main points, and finishes with a clear conclusion that summarizes your ideas and restates your position.

task achievement

There appears to be a misunderstanding of the task. The requirement was to discuss the causes of stress and suggest solutions to address the problem. The essay provided is unrelated to the topic, and seems to be a letter of recommendation for an individual named Sandesh. To achieve a higher score, you must address the topic directly, present arguments relevant to the question, and supply fitting examples.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

455 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5
band
some people say that nowadays children have an easy life and some people think that the life of children was easier than in the past. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People hold distinct views as to whether the lives of children are easier today, or in the past. I shall analyse both these aspects, however, i side with the latter one.
4.5
band
Some people think crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
These days, in spite of, Technology improving, crimes and problems from them increased enormously so that, some people believe these are a result of poverty and community matters. However, other groups think these products are from humans who have negative nature. Although, in my opinion first theory is true because crime and social issues are parallel.
6
band
when asked to choose between a life without workand working most of time , people would always choose not to work . do you agree or disagree?
To choose between an activity in which the public does not have to job and a soul that demands everyone to produce most of the occasion, there is a majority of people who want to live a activity with no production. However, this writer believes that humans need to be hard-working every day due to its benefits in financial enhancement and task promotion.
7
band
Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about whether humans learn a language from another country the only reason for travel or working in the overseas country. However, others opine that there are many reasons to anyone should study a foreign language. Therefore, I believe that learning an overseas language comes from many reasons.
8
band
Some people think the money spent on developing technology for space exploration is not justified. There are more beneficial ways to spend this money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The issue of whether the expense of improving technology for space exploration is justified has been a subject of debate. While some argue that humans should use that money for earthly needs. I firmly believe that the benefits of space exploration justify the investment, although a balanced approach is crucial.

More people are stressed today than ever before. What are the causes of this stress? What can be done to address this problem?

Fully explain your ideas

some people say that nowadays children have an easy life and some people think that the life of children was easier than in the past. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

when asked to choose between a life without workand working most of time , people would always choose not to work . do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think the money spent on developing technology for space exploration is not justified. There are more beneficial ways to spend this money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?