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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.
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The
privided
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provided
 bar chart presents the global
sales
 of five popular
moblie
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mobile
 phone bands from 2009 to 2013.
Overall
, it can be seen that the most popular band was
Nokia
, followed by
Samsung
while
 ZTE and Apple
are
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 the less popular at the beginning.
Moreover
,
Samsung
, Apple and ZTE experienced an upward trend in comparison
Nokia
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 and LG followed
a
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by a
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downward trend in the
survered
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survey
 years.
To begin
 with, the most popular mobile band was
Nokia
 with almost 450
of
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sales
 which is
a
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double
of
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Samsung
 in 2009. There was a
minior
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minor
 fall
of
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in
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Nokia
's
sales
 in 2011 and
it
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sales
plunge
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 to 250
dollars
 per year
whereas
Samsung
continued
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 grow and
peak
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peaked
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 at 450
dollars
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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.
On the other hand
, Apple started
around
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at around
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 25
dollars
 and 6 times rose to 150
dollars
 in 2013
also
 ZTE grew
slighty
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slightly
 to over 50
dollars
at the end
while
 the
sales
 of LG decreased from about 120
dollars
 to 80
dollars
 during the years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, nokia, samsung, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global sales
  • Mobile phone brands
  • Market share
  • Trends
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Technological advancements
  • Innovation
  • Consumer preferences
  • Demographics
  • Market dominance
  • Brand loyalty
  • Comparative analysis
  • Sales figures
  • Data interpretation
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