The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts present the changes in the proportion of domestic machines and how many number of
hours
Use synonyms
doing
housework per week in every family during the specific period of time from 1920 to 2019.
Wrong verb form
do
Overall
, the data on three kinds of electrical appliances at home tended to an upward trend over the 99 years, Linking Words
while
the time using of household affairs consistently declined during the same period of years.
The changes in the amount of refrigerator use were especially sharp, and the figure increased from 0 in 1920 to over 100% in 2019. The vacuum cleaners Linking Words
also
experienced a similar pattern of ascending, Linking Words
while
there were 30% of households had those machines in 1920. As for Linking Words
washing
machine, the numeric information shows that it fluctuated Correct article usage
the washing
Linking Words
then
a little rose in 2019.
It is obvious that a household spendingRephrase
apply
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the
hours
on chores dramatically dropped from 50 Use synonyms
hours
per week to 20 Use synonyms
hours
until 1960 the figure slightly decreased in a relatively stable way to 10 Use synonyms
hours
per week by the end of 2019.Use synonyms
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