The maps below show the changes in a school from 1985 to the present time.

The maps below show the changes in a school from 1985 to the present time.
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The two maps illustrate the noticeable changes in one
school
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from 1985 to the present time.
Overall
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, the first map shows the layout of the
school
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in 1985,
while
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the second map describes the current layout after a development presented an increase in
school
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population and new facilities in the
school
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. In 1985, there were 1,500 students. There was a square
car
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park
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surrounded by the road which was located at the north of the
school
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and was connected with the northwest entrance and the northeast exit. In the eastern part of the
school
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, there was a classroom block with two levels. The playing field was on location in the south-side area,
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buildings including an office, a library, a small
car
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park
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, and classrooms were located on the western side. At present time, the proportion of students has significantly increased to 2,300 students. The
car
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park
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situated in the north remains, but the size is slightly smaller. The classroom located at the east has been renovated with the addition of a third storey and there are additional classrooms at the side. In the south, the playing field has been converted to a smaller size
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the left part was demolished to build new facilities including with pool, fitness centre, and classrooms. The office remains in the western area,
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, the small
car
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park
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and the classroom were demolished. The library was converted into a learning resources centre with a computer room.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Layout
  • Significance
  • Accessibility
  • Expansion
  • Facilities
  • Trends
  • Priorities
  • Modernized
  • Well-being
  • Sustainability
  • Transportation
  • Innovative
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