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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.
The map depicts the layout of the public library two decades ago and the current look.
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, 20 years ago there were only rooms with
books
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, so there were no facilities but tables and chairs for reading and studying. (предложение правильное, но написано чуть запутано) The central library of 20 years ago had 4 main rooms which
are
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were
reading
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a reading
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room
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, an enquiry desk, children’s
books
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 and
multimedia
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a multimedia
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room
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, meanwhile adult fiction and non-fiction
books
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 on in the hallway. For people’s
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convenience
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conveniences
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conveniences,
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 there were only tables and chairs. Today,
this
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 library has a lot of services for its readers. The enquiry desk and reading
room
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 were converted into a cafe and computer
room
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, respectively. Another striking change is tables and chairs were removed from the main hall,
additionally
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 on the right of the main hall
established
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an information desk and self-service machines were established.
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 ,
children's
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the children's
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books
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room
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 was transformed into a lecture
room
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, in the same way the multimedia
room
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 was constructed for storytelling events and children’s fiction
books
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. On the left side of the main
hallall
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hall
hall all
, the adult fiction
books
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 section was replaced with all reference
books
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,
while
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 adult non-fiction
books
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 on the next side of the hall remained the same way.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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