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The only reason people work hard is to earn more money. There are no other reasons to do it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Admittedly, in recent times myriad people
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 hard in order to gain money;
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,
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 is not the main reason. In
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 essay, I will explain my opinion in terms of against
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 statement.
To begin
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 with, many workers will go even beyond their limits because they would to have a big salary.
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 is an acceptable reason for those who like to perform over time or in complicated areas.
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, many surveys report that 70% of employees will accept
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 in remote areas
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 the extra payment that they have gained outside the staple wages. If we compare to voluntary activities which ask for
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 in the same area, many of them will refuse it because they do not want to endeavour very hard in the isolated area which is very physically demanding and does not earn payment. Obviously, money is the factor of people who do their job but it is not the only one because some workers perform hard
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 they want to be an expert in one major. As illustrated, some archaeologists will accept to perform in isolated areas in order to have deep evidence regarding the heritage or natural habits of some species, even though they do not get extra bonuses from the university.
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, some workers will be happy to struggle very toughly
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 the satisfaction of results.
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, some engineers will perform on holiday in order to make sure the project will finish as scheduled. They might not worry about the extra income but considerably more about achievement. In conclusion, I disagree with the statement because people
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 to have cash but it is not the only reason to
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 hard. They would be the expert on their job and would feel happy with the results.
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Introduction
Ensure that your introductory paragraph has a clear thesis statement that provides a direct answer to the essay question. Your essay should begin with a more clearly stated position on the extent to which you agree or disagree with the given statement.
Paragraph Development
Develop your paragraphs with clear topic sentences that introduce the main idea. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, followed by supporting sentences that develop that idea with examples and explanations.
Linking
To improve logical structure, work on transitioning smoothly from one point to the next. Use a variety of linking words and phrases to help the reader understand the relationship between your ideas.
Examples
Examples provided should be more detailed and directly related to the points being made. Use specific, illustrative examples to strengthen your arguments and to demonstrate your points effectively.
Conclusion
Make sure your conclusion summarizes the main points and reiterates your position clearly. Avoid introducing new information in the conclusion; instead, synthesize the information presented throughout the essay.
Task Fulfillment
Your response needs to directly address the question throughout the essay. Ensure that each main point you make is relevant to the question and contributes to a complete answer to the essay prompt.
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