Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Because of that, some produced foods and beverage products include high levels of
sugar
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sugar
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people
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people
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an increase in the price, they continue to buy and use them in their meals in the long term. Linking Words
For example
, the Turkish government implemented new taxes on cigarettes in order to decrease cigarette consumption in the country. Unfortunately, Linking Words
this
policy did not pay off since it slightly changed Linking Words
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Moreover
, the average cigarette consumption in Turkey is nearly the same compared to before the taxes.
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Therefore
, individuals slowly abandon to use of harmful products by having more knowledge about which product has positive or negative effects. Linking Words
Thus
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Also
, more effective and permanent outcomes will occur. Linking Words
According to
an article in Public Health Magazine, In Japan, marketing campaigns that highlight the damage of used batteries to nature achieved to reduction in the rate of battery Linking Words
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this
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Instead
of high prices, customers must be aware of Linking Words
sugar
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction accurately paraphrases the essay prompt. For example, replace 'Because of that' with a clearer reference to the context.
coherence cohesion
While your example about cigarette consumption in Turkey is relevant, make sure to connect it clearly to the topic of sugar consumption for a more cohesive argument.
task achievement
Your essay contains clear and comprehensive ideas that stay relevant to the given topic.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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