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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays , it has been observed that
computers
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 are the widespread devices which can retake
teachers
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education establishments . Some individuals agree with
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others
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 claim that it is
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a wrong
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 opinion . I
am firmly disagree
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 with
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 ,
teachers
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 at schools should provide
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 environment where young generations can improve their skills independently
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various
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sittuations
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situations
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computers
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 are the essential hamper of their concentration which play a role of obstacles for its addictive nature which
installed
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 in
youth
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the youth
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 period . It is because, since childhood
childreen
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children
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 difficulties by using external
path
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paths
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for achieving
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to achieve
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a
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better results and
computers
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 are the best supporters
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Sapienza
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experiments for new
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 . They give numerous
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tasks for presentation and materials located only at the local library .
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 87% of
students
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 failed because they
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couldn't
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t
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searched
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the
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 information
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lack
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 of
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 characteristics . But
other
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the other
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 13% who
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grew
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 up in the poverty line in Africa don'
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access
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to
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 the internet since
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childhood
 and teached only by
a schoolteachers
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schoolteachers
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,
respectivelly
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respectively
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great scores .
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spiritual support
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person
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instead
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a
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robot .
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Indeed
, it is true that AI and
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applications are improving day by day but nothing can'
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 warmth , because the
sence
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sense
science
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programms
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programs
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students
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students
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student's
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 mind about support by their
teachers
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 and lecturers in
compare
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 with AI . They claim that it is interesting talking with CHAT GPT or
another applications
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another application
other applications
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 but after some periods it is
annoyable
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. But university
teachers
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 help them in different situations .
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 department
help
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helps
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students
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in
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with
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 financial issues
for
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 realize
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start-ups
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. It is
obviously
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 that robots can'
t
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To sum up
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 , I guess
psyhological
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psychological
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computers
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 play a crucial role
for
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 the creation of my agreement
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 topic .

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coherence cohesion
Consider carefully structuring your essay by creating clear and distinct paragraphs each addressing a unique point that supports your opinion. Start with an introduction, followed by body paragraphs each with a single clear idea, and end with a concise conclusion summarizing your main points.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating clear, logical transitions between your sentences and ideas. Use a range of cohesive devices and conjunctions to help your essay flow more naturally and make it easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your opinion on the prompt and your conclusion restates your view and summarizes the main points of your argument.
task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task prompt and clearly express your viewpoint throughout your essay to meet the task achievement criteria fully. Each paragraph should be centered around points that directly relate to your main argument.
task achievement
Incorporate specific examples to support your ideas, ensuring they are directly relevant to your argument. Aim to provide clear and detailed illustrations that reinforce your points.
task achievement
Enhance the clarity of your ideas by breaking complex sentences into simpler ones and avoiding overly long sentences that might confuse the reader. Strive for clarity and simplicity when conveying your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital learning
  • Personalized guidance
  • Blended learning
  • Remote education
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Human interaction
  • Cultural dimension
  • Mentorship
  • Critical thinking
  • Educational technology
  • Learning outcomes
  • Role model
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