Nowadays, people believe that governments should invest tax-payer’s money in healthcare, others believe that money should be use in other areas. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear and logical structure. It should begin with an introduction, follow with body paragraphs each dedicated to a single point of view, and conclude with a coherent conclusion.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion should clearly state the topic and your overall opinion. Remember to write a more detailed conclusion that reflects upon the points discussed in the essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
Support each main point with clear, relevant examples and explanations. Avoid general statements that do not offer concrete evidence or reasoning.
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Respond completely to all parts of the task prompt. Address each point of view, providing a balanced discussion before giving your own opinion.
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Ideas should be clear and well-developed throughout the essay. Avoid vague statements and ensure each paragraph elaborates on a single idea effectively.
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Include specific, relevant examples to support your points. General or unrelated examples may not adequately demonstrate an understanding of the topic.
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