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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.  Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.  Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart indicates the
transfromation
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transformation
 of
tourism
 in terms of two countries -
Australia
 and
Germany
 - from 1960 to 2010.
Overall
,
the
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tourists
 from Europe took up the largest segment in
Australia
 in 1960.
Similarly
, in
Germany
, the
vistors
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visitors
 from Europe
also
 accounted for the largest
part
 in 1960.
Surpricely
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Surprise
, over a 50-year period, it can
be
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witnessed a dramatic change in
Australia
, the
tourists
 from Asia
accouted
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accounted
account
 for 63%
in
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of
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whole
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the whole
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tourism
stucture
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structure
.
In contrast
, in
Germany
,
the
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tourists
 From Europe still took up the largest segment in 2010. At the same time,
the
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visitors
 from Britain became the
most small
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smallest
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part
 of
tourism
,
accouted
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accounted
 for 6%. Over the 50-year period, it experienced a significant change in
Australia
. The Asian
tourists
 climbed by 53%.
In contrast
, the European
visitors
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dropped
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 by 43%. Meanwhile, the
tourists
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number of tourists
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 from the USA decreased, from 12% to 1%,
became
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becoming
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 the
most small
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smallest
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 segment in
Australia
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Australian
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trourism
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tourism
.
Conversely
,
the
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tourism
of
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in
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Germany
 did not change dramatically, the European
visitors
 still represented the largest
part
in
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of
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Gemany's
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Germany's
tourism
, it just decreased by 5%, between 1960 and 2010.
However
, the
visitors
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number of visitors
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 from Britain dipped to 6%, it became the
most small
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smallest
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part
in
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of
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Germany
's
tourism
, over a 50-year period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourism, australia, germany, tourists, part, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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