IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 2

The only way to improve road safety is to impose severe punishment for driving offences. Do you agree or disagree?

#road #safety #punishment #offences
Dear Smith, Hope you and your family are doing great. I know you have a small cute dog that you love
him
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
so much, but I am writing to you to bring your attention that we can hear his bark during the day.
Although
 the common wall is sound insulation, unfortunately, his park can be heard throughout the day which disturbs our conform. It would be great if you
try
Wrong verb form
tried
show examples
 to train him to stop barking. I know it is not easy, but I searched on the Internet and I found that some animal trainers are able to help you. I would be happy to help you so if you want, I can send you the phone numbers of some trainers which I found. I hope that my request doesn’t cause you any inconvenience and you can solve
this
 problem soon.Say hello to your family.
Your
Correct the word
Yours
show examples
 faithfully Marzi B
Submitted by ghazale on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Coherence and Cohesion
Develop a clear logical structure by organizing your essay into distinct paragraphs that include an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on a specific main point.
Coherence and Cohesion
In your introduction and conclusion, clearly state your opinion or the main topic of the essay. The introduction should introduce the topic, and the conclusion should provide a summary of the main points discussed.
Coherence and Cohesion
Support your main points with relevant examples or evidence to demonstrate a more thorough understanding of the topic.
Task Achievement
Ensure you are responding to the essay prompt directly. It appears that your response does not directly address the given topic about road safety and driving offences.
Task Achievement
Express comprehensive ideas that directly relate to the topic and develop these ideas fully to show understanding and depth in your response to the task.
Task Achievement
Provide specific examples that are relevant to the topic to strengthen your argument or point of view. Remember that the given topic requires a discussion of road safety measures, not pet disturbances.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: