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You should spend around 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend around 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the usage rates of four kinds of transport in the city of Edmonton,
while
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 the table provides the results of a survey about the reasons why people prefer
cars
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.
Overall
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, it is obvious that
cars
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 are the most common type of transportation in the given city and the most mentioned reason to use automobiles is commuting to work
in contrast
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 to other motives.
Cars
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 are used more by the citizens of Edmonton, as 45% of the local population uses
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 variation of
cars
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.
In contrast
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, the second most commonly preferred option for locals is the LRT (35%). The remaining 20% is taxis and buses. As written earlier, commuting to work is the most mentioned reason by those who use
cars
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 in the city of Edmonton. To be specific, 55% of respondents used
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 motive
as
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to explain
they
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why they
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 prefer
cars
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. ‘Business’ (45%) and ‘taking children to school’ (40%) were
also
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 mentioned frequently by the users of
cars
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,
whereas
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 reasons
such
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 as ‘shopping’ and ‘leisure’ were noted with lower frequencies both being mentioned by 15% of the participant, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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