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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie diagrams depict information about a variety of excuses from society regarding their commuting process to their
workplace
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 by car or bicycle. Units are measured in percentage. In general, most individuals tend to
work
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 by bicycle
due to
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healthy
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health
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 and environmental reasons,
whereas
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 comfort is the primary excuse for those who drive to the
workplace
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. As we can see, nearly half per cent of the public is willing to cycle their bike to
work
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 because of health and fitness
as well as
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 less pollution. At the same point, 13% of the people opt for cycling since they have no cost and
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 with a mere 1% gap, faster than driving is another excuse why society is willing to pedal their bicycle to the
workplace
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.
Lastly
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, below 20% of the individuals, no parking problems is the
last
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 reason for cycling. Moving to the next pie chart, driving to
work
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due to
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 comfort
reason
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reasons
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 reaches the highest percentage (40%), whilst faster than cycling, carrying things to
work
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, and safer than cycling have almost similar number of people, which is approximately 15%. At the same time, 21% of those consider distance to
work
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 as their primary excuse for driving to the
workplace
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workplace, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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