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Students today can access information online, so libraries necessary. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#students #access #information #libraries
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One of the burning issues of today’s world is online
data
 use by
students
, these days
students
 can enter many online sources which helps them to enhance their knowledge so, a number of
students
 believe that they do not need to attend
libraries
 to get
information
. from another perspective, all
students
 live in modern world’s, they opt access to
information
’s by some particular website;
however
, printed books are always having fruitful
information
 which does not ignore that. Many
students
 claim that the world is known as a modern world because technology is improving and the majority of
students
 prefer to use
this
 phenomenon in their lives;
furthermore
, they are
also
 looking for a way to boost their knowledge with online sources since they do not have
time
 to attend
libraries
; in fact,
according to
 the latest news about members of the internet who wanted to access to
information
data
 was significantly increase in the 21st century so
this
 indicates that all student prefer to improve their knowledge with many specific websites
such
 as YouTube, Udemy and Coursers;
as a result
, some
students
 who need to save their
time
 and have limited
time
, they chose to achieve
information
 online
instead
 of spending
time
 on
libraries
.
However
, a number of
students
 argue that printed books are deeply handy for getting
information
;
in addition
, some people aged between 45 to 70, they are
also
 opt to get
data
 from printed books because older audiences cannot struggle with technology;
for example
, these people always chose go to the
libraries
 to get
data
 and improves their intelligence or they can buy physical book to read it at home;
thus
, increase
libraries
 in inner city for
this
 type of people are necessary and councils have to make plan for it.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible information
  • online databases
  • e-books
  • educational websites
  • community centers
  • physical books
  • literacy programs
  • peer-reviewed resources
  • misleading information
  • digital divide
  • high-speed internet
  • underprivileged communities
  • custodians of culture
  • archival material
  • conducive environment
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