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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projecyions for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projecyions for 2050.
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The pie chart illustrates information about the different ages of inhabitants of
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and 2050. All
two
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two-year
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years
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 residents who have 0-14
years
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 in
Yemen
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 are above
the
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apply
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30 %. In
Italy
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Italy,
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pie
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pies
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 of younger populations are
the
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apply
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biggest
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bigger
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 than other pies.
It is clear that
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 older populations are
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less than other residents in
Yemen
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, which shows under
the
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10% in
pie
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a pie
the pie
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 chart. The younger people show quite changes between the two
years
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, which increased around 11 %. There are quite a few differences among the countries in order of younger population in 2000.
While
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older
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the older
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 generation is the
less
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fewer
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 people that survive in
Yemen
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,
it is clear that
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 these humans
are
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will
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 live longer in Italy in 2050. But
younger
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the younger
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 generation will not change a lot, 15-50
years
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 old residents’ percentage will
nearly
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be nearly
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a
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apply
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fifty after 50
years
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.
Overall
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youthful
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young
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 people
have
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are
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large
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a large
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 proportion in different countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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