The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projecyions for 2050.
The pie chart illustrates information about the different ages of inhabitants of
Yemen
and Italy in 2000 and 2050. All two
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two-year
years
residents who have 0-14 years
in Yemen
are above the
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Italy
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Yemen
, which shows under the
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Yemen
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the younger
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