The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.

The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.
The map illustrates the changes
of
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in
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the art
gallery
over an 18-year period between 2005 and now.
Overall
, the eastern wing remains intact and the western wing undergoes striking transformations. The art
gallery
bonus is the ramp for wheelchairs. In 2005, the eastern wing included
exhibition
rooms 1, 2,
3
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and 3
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from the door. Right behind the
entrance
was the reception in the middle of the
room
. On the north end, there were stairs. In the west of the
entrance
, there was the
exhibition
room
4, the biggest
room
in the
gallery
. The cafe was in the North-Western corner of the
gallery
. At present, the art galleries aren’t just for displaying products. It is a bonus device to serve the visitors. It creates a feeling of comfort and convenience for viewers. The eastern wing remains unchanged. Outside the
entrance
is a ramp for wheelchairs useful for the disabled. The
exhibition
room
4 in the South-Western corner is converted into the Children's area and Temporary
Exhibition
. The vending machine is in place of the
gallery
office. And the
gallery
shop makes way for the cafe in the North-Western corner. The stairs in the north end are smaller and next to bonus lifts. The reception in the middle moves towards the
entrance
.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, exhibition, entrance, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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