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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts provide information on temperatures and daylight hours in two countries (
London
 and
Sydney
) during the same weekend in
December
 2018.
Overall
, the average
temperature
 in
London
 was relatively lower than in
Sydney
. Australia had a long daytime,
while
 the UK had less daytime during the weekend.
To begin
 with, the highest
temperature
 in
London
 was 13
°C
 on Saturday (
December
 29, 2018), and the lowest
temperature
 recorded was 3 °C on the same day.
However
, in
Sydney
, the
temperature
 reached a peak of 31 °C on Sunday,
December
 30, 2018,
while
 the minimum
temperature
 was 17
°C
 on Friday,
December
 28. Turning to sunrises, the average time of sunrise was
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8.05 a.
m
. in
London
, and dawn was around 3.57 p.
m
. Compared to the UK, sunrise in Australia was earlier at around 5.45 p.
m
. and sunset at approximately 8.07 p.
m
.
Furthermore
,
London
 received daylight for about 7 hours during the weekends,
while
Sydney
 received it for approximately 14 hours.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, december, temperature, °c, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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