You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Writing a letter to the course director at the cookery school.In your letter . describe what you enjoyed about the course . say how much cooking you have done since the course . suggest another cookery course you would like the school to offer

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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letter to you as a student feedback based on my personal learning experience. Conestoga Culinary School provides the best cooking classes in the Ontario region. I have gained a lot of experience during the period of
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. My favorite part of
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course
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was the baking sessions which I learned at a very fast pace. The baking staff is very supportive they made the entire session more interesting and enjoyable by teaching different
recipes
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in daily class. I have enjoyed baking cupcakes that are not only salubrious but
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palatable because of the addition of dry fruits in them. I have done a level 2 cooking
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of two months where I learned to cook Italian Mexican and Asian food
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. In the period, I practically cook all Italian
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like Pizza, and pasta
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Mexican cuisine
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as veggie Wraps. I don't think there is any other institute that provides
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great exposure to learning in
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short period. I have done approx 60% of the cooking during
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cookery
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. I would like to suggest you update your
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material with vegan
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the rising trend of living on plant-based food. If you offer
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course
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more people will be fascinated by your services. The
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services are excellent of your academy I liked it very much. Yours Sincerely, Navdeep Kaur
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Coherence and Cohesion
While the letter demonstrates a logical flow of ideas, there is room for improvement in maintaining a clear logical structure by ensuring smooth transitions and clearer topic sentences for each paragraph.
Task Achievement
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriately formal, but the overall writing tone fluctuates and could be more consistent in maintaining formality and politeness throughout.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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