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These dats people are using the internet for shopping, work and to communicate with others without the need for face to face meetings. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the vast majority prefer virtual benefits for shopping, daily conversation and job-related purposes that require no physical interaction with the public. Indeed, the eligibility provides more convenience than real-time meetings. Through the essay, I'll discuss both the advantages and disadvantages that come with new features of viral lifestyle changes. Modern world civilizations are using the internet resources for trading, working and communicating. The main reason for the hype over virtuality happens to be related to the advantage and the accessibility that prevent unnecessary time consumption. Another reason is,that a lot of people believe that the variety of availabilities is wider in comparison to the actual experience of in-location experience. The phenomenon became common during the COVID-19 pandemic. Because of the restrictions, most people realized how the internet was able to keep life efficient where human interactions were prohibited.
On the other hand
, it is visible to analyze how our society turns numb
while
 lacking social interactions. Online activities make individuals introverted. That's why, youngsters are unable to socialize in offline reality when it comes to expressing themselves. Gradually, an easy lifestyle makes the lazy community and reduces sensitivity to human reactions. The new generation will suffer endless disabilities because of the next level of interaction that comes with comfort. In the near future,
this
 habit will change generational connections all over the world. In conclusion, it is undeniable to claim the importance of technology technology-generated world converting any face-to-face meetings into digital platforms.
However
, the life-changing invention will create a new understanding for the future of mankind and will change its fate.
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Ensure consistency in using terms (e.g., 'virtual benefits' vs. 'virtual reality').
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The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion which summarize the main points.
task achievement
The main points are relevant and supported with some reasoning.

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