The pie charts provided information about the average money spent on households in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts provided information about the average money spent on households in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The following diagrams

illustrates

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the basic amount of funds invested in households in two different countries during the period of 2010.

Firstly

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, the transportation costs in Japan were more than in Malaysia two times(10 per

cent

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). The average costs for food in Japan and Malaysia were approximately

same

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the same

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and accounted for almost a quarter and 27 per

cent

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respectively.

In addition

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, the proportion of money spent on medical purposes was

noticebly

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noticeably

less than for other purposes and made up only 6 per

cent

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for

Japaniese

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Japanese

and 3 per

cent

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for Malaysians.

Secondly

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, the population of Malaysia spent over a third of household

spendings

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spending

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on housing

while

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Japaniese

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Japanese

invested in houses 21 per

cent

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Other average percentage

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Another average percentage

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remaining

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the remaining

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money from all expenses in both countries

spent

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was spent

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on different services and goods. Looking from an

overall

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perspective, the main source of expense in Japan was transportation

while

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malaysians

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Malaysians

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spent the basic amount of money on housing on

the

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apply

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average.

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Dec 8, 2023

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

158 words

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