the diagram show the cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon

the diagram show the cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon
The diagrams provide information about the cyclical life process of
salmon
as a species of large
fish
.
Overall
, it reveals that there are four distinct stages in the process, and it shows they occur in freshwater and saline water with different
lifespan
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. In the initial stage,
salmon
eggs are situated in the upper river underneath small stones and reeds where the water flow is slow. It took around 5-6 months to wait until the eggs
are
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hatched to become small
fish
. After that, those small
fish
which
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called fry that length
at
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3-8 cm travelled to the fast
lowing
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river and spent approximately 4 years before ready to move to the open sea. In the subsequent stage, the growing
fish
that is
smolt
with
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12-15cm long entered the ocean and used about five years
long
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to stay before becoming the adult
salmon
of
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70-76 cm long. By reaching
this
stage, the
salmon
turned back to the upper river to transfer their eggs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, fish with synonyms.
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