The pie charts give information about the three various elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of three meal plans, namely an average diet, a healthy diet and a healthy diet for sport.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
there
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their
gredients
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ingredients
include
protein, fat and Wrong verb form
including
carbohydrates
in there
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their
type
of diets that they are average, healthy and healthy for exercise.
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a type
Overall
, the most
percentage for every Correct word choice
highest
diet
is for carbohydrates
while
fat consist
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consists
the
lowest sector for all of the graphs. In all habits, protein Change preposition
of the
occypies
the second amount but only in the average Correct your spelling
occupies
diet
takes the same place with carbohydrates
.
In the average diet
, fat takes only two in ten proportion while
these percent
for the others stand at 40 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
. In Change the spelling
per cent
healthy
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a healthy
diet
, fat includes the same percent
of the average Change the spelling
per cent
diet
while
in diet
for Add an article
the diet
a diet
sport
it has Add a comma
sport,
the
lower amount at 15 Correct article usage
a
percent
.
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per cent
In contrast
, the numbers for carbohydrates
has eight in ten of the healthy diet
for sport while
in
the healthy normal diets takes half of it. In the Change preposition
apply
last
chart, it means the average diet
that only includes 40 percent
, Change the spelling
per cent
although
it is the
large percentage Correct article usage
a
but
it is the lowest Remove the conjunction
apply
percent
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per cent
between
its percentages.Change preposition
among
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