The pie charts give information about the three various elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of three meal plans, namely an average diet, a healthy diet and a healthy diet for sport.

The pie charts give information about the three various elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of three meal plans, namely an average diet, a healthy diet and a healthy diet for sport.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
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gredients
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ingredients
include
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protein, fat and
carbohydrates
in
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type
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of diets that they are average, healthy and healthy for exercise.
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, the
most
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percentage for every
diet
is for
carbohydrates
while
fat
consist
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the
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lowest sector for all of the graphs. In all habits, protein
occypies
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occupies
the second amount but only in the average
diet
takes the same place with
carbohydrates
. In the average
diet
, fat takes only two in ten proportion
while
these
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for the others stand at 40
percent
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. In
healthy
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diet
, fat includes the same
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of the average
diet
while
in
diet
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the diet
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for
sport
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it has
the
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lower amount at 15
percent
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.
In contrast
, the numbers for
carbohydrates
has eight in ten of the healthy
diet
for sport
while
in
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the healthy normal diets takes half of it. In the
last
chart, it means the average
diet
that only includes 40
percent
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,
although
it is
the
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large percentage
but
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it is the lowest
percent
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between
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its percentages.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbohydrates, diet, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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