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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

Some believe that educating
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 on the distinction between good and wrong should involve
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.
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 I accept that
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 can learn the difference between right and wrong at a young age
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 to teach good behaviors to
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 without facing
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 hassles, some
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 punishments should be taken. To commence with, some
parents
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 believe that
punishment
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 can be an effective way to teach
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 about the consequences of their actions. Because of
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, if
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 are punished for something they did wrong, they will quickly realize that it was wrong and will stop themselves from doing it in the future.
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, if
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 take their friend's toy without their friend's permission,
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 should inform the
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 by giving
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punishment
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 that their action was a form of theft so that they will not do
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 in the future. That said, penalties can have a detrimental impact on kids because at
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 age they are immensely sensitive and
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punishment
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 cannot help them make the proper decision. In my opinion, if
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 and teachers scold or spank
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 for their
misbehavior
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, may bring about adverse effects.
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,
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 and teachers need to understand the difference between discipline and abuse and use
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 punishments, consisting of asking them to do household chores, taking away
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’s pocket money, and so forth. It is unlikely that
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 penalties will hurt their feelings and destroy the bond of empathy and companionship between
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 and
children
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. In Conclusion, in my view,
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 offspring should be able to distinguish between right and wrong
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 at an early age,
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 can have a devastating effect on youngsters, and their
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 and teachers ought to be cautious not to hurt their feelings, only
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punishment
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 should be carried out.

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