In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.  Why is this the case?  What can be done about this problem?

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advances
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the world,
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there still are many individuals
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face
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the
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shortages of
food
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analyse
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the possible factors and offer my personal solution.
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with, there are many reasons
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cause people
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hungry, like
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financial
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situations
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, wars, and the
lack
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of natural
resources
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.
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, some
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developing
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usually
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financial problems, because they need funds to build
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infrastructure
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the
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government
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the money to
constructure
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rather than people's lives.
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, some regions
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conflicts with other
countries
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,
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aftermath
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situation, the government
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the
resources
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and energy to take care of folks.
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, some nations
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a
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lack
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of
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natural
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because of the climate,
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geography, and
the
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soil.
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, people not only can not plant the crops by themselves
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but
also
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face
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a
lack
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of
resources
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. To tackle the problem of
tood
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food
good
shortage, international
organzation
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organisations
and
the
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healthy
countries
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play a crucial role in giving
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help
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hand to these hungry regions.
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,
develped contries
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developed countries
like the USA should donate
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food
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or funds to these
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developing
countries
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.
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, international
organzation
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organisations
should
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the
responsibilities
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responsibility
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of
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for
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allocating
resources
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, and
make
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the
food
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market
be
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more fair
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. In conclusion, many aspects can influence the problem of a
lack
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of
food
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. To solve
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, in my view, some of
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powertul
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powerful
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should assist
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in addressing
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this
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problem, regardless
donation
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of donation
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of
food
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or funds,
otherwise
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, they can give some
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in agriculture to these hungry regions. It is important that international
organzations
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organisations
be responsible for allocating the
food
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resources
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of
whole
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world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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