The bar chart shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003.

The bar chart shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003.
The column graph contrasts the
import
prices of per kilometre clothing by Europen Union from six various countries in 1993 with that of 2003.
Overall
, the
Europen
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Union paid the
the
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highest amount to Argentina for garments
import
and
lowest
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to Bangladesh in both years. Admittedly, Brazil was unconverted probably, all the time.
According to
the demonstration, the European Union expended the uppermost
the
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quantity
for
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clothing
import
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by Argentina, which was
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28
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at 28
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pounds
per km in 1993. As
this
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seen,
this
rate was the highest to
comparing
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with others. After a decade, it neaped to just over 25
pounds
,
menwhile
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meanwhile
, Argentina took the dominance in the given question. The second and third top figures were given to Brazil and Japan, roughly, 23
pounds
and 15
pounds
respectively. It is
also
evident that
,
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China and India obtained less than that,
however
, their rate was 16 and 11
pounds
more supreme rather than the
import
clothing
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of clothing
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for
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per km from Bangladesh. Bangladesh
recieved
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received
only around 5
pounds
, which was almost half of the times less than the figure paid to China in 2003. As
notationed
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noted
atop, Brazil was 22
pounds
levelled off between 1993 and 2003.
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