The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and

Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The bar graph illustrates how tourists that
Chinese
, American, Turkish and
Brazilian
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Brazilians
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enjoy
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enjoyed
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their holidays
especially
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in Greece,
on
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August 2019. The kind of categories are going to the beach, reading books, and visiting other places.
Overall
, tourists
did
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not want to look
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another landscapes
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so the extent of visiting places is the smallest. At
first,
the most striking point is the orange one.
Chinese
tourists’ hour with books was overwhelming. It seems that about double compared with the lowest people, Turkey and Brazil. There were huge differences among reading,
while
going out
reach
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a lowest of just 1 hour. Brazilians were at the beach the longest, they were
also
3 hours more than
Chinese
, the shortest one. Turkish and American passed at diverse spots over against
Chinese
and Brazilian,
nevertheless
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it had not so big gaps. The average of activities
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showed
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balance with Turkish.
In contrast
, we can find the bias of tendency with
Chinese
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chinese with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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