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Some people believe that eventually all the jobs will be done by artificial intelligence. What is your opinion?

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 some, in the future almost all the 
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 can be done by artificial 
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however
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, I strongly disagree with
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 statement because AI cannot replicate human nature and it is only a tool that makes human
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 more efficient. AI cannot 
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 like humans in a 
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 with creativity, emotions and making decisions. Even
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 makes
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 life easier people cannot depend on that all the time because 
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 artificial
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unable
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 to understand the emotions of
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human
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.
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, if a robot handling an emergency call it can only assist the person as instructed but cannot understand how that person feels or need any emotional guidelines.
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, human nature is always changing
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, still experts struggling to replicate the AI with
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 intentions.
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,
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are
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 cannot 
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 all the
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 because there is always a need for real people's help to do the
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.
On the other hand
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, artificial
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 is a tool which is designed to make day-to-day jobs easier. Most 
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the
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 companies use AI tools to enhance the performance of 
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 and services.
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, Google uses AI
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 to monitor,process and secure customer data because trillions of data cannot be handled by employers
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, well-instructed
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 are managing these tasks.
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, these
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 can do only trained tasks and cannot do more than that
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, whenever any issue 
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occurs
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 employers need to handle those issues since they cannot be handled by the AI.
To conclude
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, artificial
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 taking over people is entirely not possible because it can only be used as a supporting tool and these robots cannot replace human nature even in the future.
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, in any kind of 
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 necessary.

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