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You recently went to visit a friend in their new home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: tell your friend what you liked about his/her new house say what you did or enjoyed most about your stay with your friend suggest when and where you could meet your friend next

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Dear Lovjeet, First of all, I want to congratulate you and your family on your new home. I hope you are doing great. I am writing
this
 letter regarding my recent trip to your new house.
Firstly
, your house’s location is very excellent as it is far from downtown.
Moreover
, the neighbourhood is
also
 very cooperative. Everyone is always
welling
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 to help others in difficult situations.
Finally
, your house has a beautiful view of the park and lake. During my stay, I enjoyed the food prepared by your mother because it was very delicious. I loved the campfire in your backyard with light music. I liked the idea of having
big
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 backyard equipped with modern facilities. Next month, I am planning a birthday party
on
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at
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 my place, so I want to invite you. I am inviting Gurpreet as well. It will be a great time again. Looking forward to
meet
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 you. Best Regards, Tajinder Singh
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that the information is organized around it. Avoid including unrelated details in each paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating more cohesive links between paragraphs, which could include using a wider range of linking devices or better transitioning between ideas.
task achievement
Try to cover all aspects of the task more evenly, ensuring you expand on each point fully and provide specific details where possible. Make sure that you are addressing all parts of the prompt in a balanced way.
task achievement
The tone is generally well-suited to the task, but remember to maintain a consistent register throughout the letter. Watch out for informal expressions or words that could be replaced with more appropriate equivalents.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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