the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.
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The two maps show the previous layout of
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bookstore
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a bookstore
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in 2000 and how it is currently after the renovation.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the size of the
bookstore
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remains the same.
However
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, there are some rearrangements related to several book sections
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with most noticeable addition of
café
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a café
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inside the building. In 2000, the
bookstore
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had its biggest area designated for fiction
books
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, followed by
non-fiction
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the non-fiction
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genre as its second biggest section. The
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books
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located
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near the entrance, next to the newly published
books
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and the service desk. Other sections like Art, Hobbies and Cookery
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are located
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at the centre of the building. After the renovation, it can be seen that the
bookstore
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entrance,
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books
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, new
books
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section and
also
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service desk remain the same,
while
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the area previously used solely for Fiction sections is now divided into more varied
books
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categories
together with
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books
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related to art, hobbies and cookery. The fiction section
that
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previously located on the corner of the
bookstore
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is now given into non-fiction genres. The most noticeable change is there is a new café and three tables located at the centre of the library.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bookstore, books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • changes
  • occurred
  • transformations
  • developments
  • span
  • visual
  • comparison
  • illustrates
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