The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. ( task 1, cam 13 test 1)

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. ( task 1, cam 13 test 1)
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The given maps provide information about how a hospital in an urban was accessed by road between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that access to the clinic has been well developed with a car park not only for the public but
also
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for the personnel.
Moreover
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, a roundabout has been well constructed.
To begin
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with, in 2007, a ring lane was located in the north of the picture,
in addition
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, the
city
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clinic was situated just below the north.
Moreover
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, both the general public
as well as
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the staff shared the same car parking space.
Furthermore
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, there were six bus stops with a hospital route situated in the middle of the bus stop.
Also
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,
city
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roads were available which branched not only in the west but
also
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in the east
as well as
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in the south.
By contrast
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, in 2010, access to the hospital has completely changed.
Firstly
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, the public
as well as
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the workforce have their own parking space.
While
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the public has their parking space located in the east of the design, the staff has their own in the east near the
city
Use synonyms
road.
Secondly
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, a bus station has been constructed which can be found in the west section of the plan.
This
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station branched to the north and the south roundabout of the map,
however
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, both the ring avenue and the
city
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pavement remained unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, as well as, moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • located
  • situated
  • layout
  • infrastructure
  • facility
  • public transport
  • bus route
  • roundabout
  • intersection
  • development
  • modification
  • enhancement
  • access
  • comparison
  • previously
  • subsequently
  • provide access to
  • implement
  • upgrade
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