🔶Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. 🔸Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Advertising
is
a
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best way to sell the
product
by
company
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the company
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to
again
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gain
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profit and sell their
product
. One segment of people
belives
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that advertising is the way which
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us to buy the
product
and another segment of people think that it does not attract our attention as
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is usual.
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,
i
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believes
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that it manipulates the mind of the
person
to buy the thing more quickly and
help
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helps
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in the selling of their products. On the one hand,
an
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individuals are not paying much attention to the advertisement.
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, they become aware
about
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that
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company
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strategy to sell their
product
and for that
purpose
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they are
doing
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the
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publicity of their goods.
For instance
, any seller of the organisation try to sell their material by using the help of ads and spend money on it ,so that every
person
come to know about the
product
,
moreover
, human
are
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now awaked or become smart with the help of technology that how they are cheated by
this
company's owner to get more profit.
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,
i
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believe that
such
markerting
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marketing
strategies will not work now because citizens are more educated towards these things. On the
another
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hand, Everyone is going behind
quick
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result and cheap
product
because they have less patience and want to
send
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spend
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less money on any material which anyone buy.
For example
, if a
person
come
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to know that
such
an
advertistment
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advertisement
are
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giving
fast pace
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consquences
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consequences
by applying it
then
surely they are going for it.
Therefore
,
i
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think
such
way
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a way
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to
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showing the
product
on
televison
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television
or radio
attract
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attracts
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the
person
to buy it without thinking
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exact motive
of
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it
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.
To conclude
,
such
an
advertistment
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advertisement
help
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helps
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person
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a person
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to buy it and other side it will not taken an account by an individual who
do
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does
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not want it . In my opinion, it depends on the personal choices of the individual who wants to purchase it
according to
its
requirement
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or not.
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Introduction & Conclusion
The essay lacks a clear introductory paragraph which diminishes its effectiveness in setting the stage for the discussion. An introduction should clearly state the topic and outline the writer's intention to discuss the given views and provide their own opinion.
Paragraph Structure
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Linking & Concluding
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Task Achievement
In response to the task, your essay should provide a more comprehensive discussion of both viewpoints. Expand on these perspectives with relevant examples or explanations to illustrate your points.
Sentence Structure
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • psychological tactics
  • emotional appeal
  • celebrity endorsements
  • social proof
  • brand awareness
  • brand loyalty
  • desensitized
  • ad fatigue
  • selective attention
  • ubiquity
  • targeted ads
  • personalization
  • consumer behavior
  • consumer awareness
  • advertising claims
  • societal values
  • effectiveness
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