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The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.

The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
The table illustrates data on different kinds of transportation registered in 2010,2012 and 2014 in
Australia
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.
Overall
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,It is seen that all five
types
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 of vehicle
registration
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 increased from 201. to 2014 in
Australia
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. In detail, motorcycle
registration
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 increased impressively by +30.8% from 2010 to 2014 in
Australia
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.The number of registrations of these
types
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 of transportation was 540000 in 2010,
then
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 the number improved to 680000 in 2012 and jumped to 709000 in 2014 in
Australia
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.
After
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this
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,light trucks' percentage change of
registration
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 stood at +23.5% from 2010 to 2014 in
Australia
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.In 2010,the
registration
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 digits of these vehicles were 106000,which rose to 124,000 and 131000 in 2012 and 2014 respectively in
Australia
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. Commercial vehicles and passenger cars percentage was 17.4% and 10.2% respectively from 2010 to 2014 in
Australia
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.
Registration
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 of these
types
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 of vehicles was 2300000 and 11800000 in 2010 and grew in number to 2700000 and 13000000 in 2014 in the country.
However
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,the heavy truck
registration
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 percentage change was the lowest among the five
types
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 of transportation from 2010 to 2014 in the state.In spite of
this
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,
registration
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 numbers
were
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rose from 384000 in 2014 to 416000 in 2014 in the country.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, types, registration with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trends
  • registration
  • vehicles
  • comparison
  • categories
  • growth
  • decline
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • surge
  • consistent
  • pattern
  • speculate
  • factors
  • economic conditions
  • consumer preferences
  • advancements
  • technology
  • implications
  • infrastructure
  • environment
  • societal behaviors
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