The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 to 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between  1920 to 2019.
The first line graph illustrates the evolution of
household
electrical appliance ownership in a country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that all electrical appliances became more popular,
in particular
refrigerators and vacuum cleaners.Leading to a significant reduction in the amount of time spent on
household
work.
To begin
with,in 1920 washing machines were the most common electrical appliances.Ownership reached 40% of households.
However
, in 1980, the washing machine jumped 100%.Almost a third of households owned vacuum cleaners in 1920. But in 2000, the vacuum cleaner soared 100%.
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refrigerators in 1920 decreased.
nevertheless
, After a few years, its number tripled.
However
, ownership increased rapidly and by 1980 there was one in every
household
. noticeable,as families acquired more electrical appliances, the amount of
household
work, including cooking, cleaning, and laundry, decreased significantly. The number of
hours
spent doing
such
work decreased from 50
hours
a week in 1920 to just 20
hours
in 1960 and 10
hours
in 2019.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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