In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think is postitive or negative situation?

Some
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countries
people
take a
hosuse
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house
for
rent
. Because of
thir
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their
jobs. I am going with taking a
house
rent
is far better than
owing
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owning
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a
house
.
Coutries
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Countries
like
U.S.A
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the U.S.A
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,
U.K
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UK
and other
european
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European
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countries
. Most of the
people
should take the
house
for rental. Because of their jobs. Some
people
like students,
employees
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and employees
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are come
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come
have come
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from different
countries
. So they can not afford to buy a
house
or
owning
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own
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a
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apply
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land to build a
house
. So they take a
house
for rental. One of the
reason
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reasons
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is
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why
lot
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a lot
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of
people
take
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buy
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a
house
for
rent
means,
70
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that 70
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% of the
people
came for work or education from different
countries
or
provision
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provisions
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. They prefer to take a
house
for
rent
rather than owning a
house
. Because they
are
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do
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not stay in the country for long long years.
The another
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advantage of
rental
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renting
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a
house
is for
bachelors
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a bachelors
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. If three to five members take a
house
for rental
means
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apply
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the
rent
amount will be reduced for one
indivijual
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individual
. other than
thatt
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that
, the electricity bill, gas bill and water amount
also
reduced. They can share the amount. It
reduce
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reduces
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their
expensses
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expenses
. There is some default is
also
there for renting a
house
. A
prson
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person
take
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taking
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a
house
for
rent
means he or she should pay some advance to the
bulding
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building
owner
or
house
owner
. The reason is if the
person
vaccate
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vacates
the
house
means the
owner
give
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gives
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some notice
to
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apply
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the to the
person
.
According to
the
list
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list,
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the
person
need
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needs
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to
done
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do
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all the things in the
house
. If the
person
is not willing to do means the
house
owner
took some in the advance which the
person
was paid. In conclusion, renting a
house
is far more greater than owning a
hous
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house
. Some default is
also
there for renting a
house
. But it is more useful for the students and the
emplyoes
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employees
employers
employes
for renting a
house
.
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