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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart and the table explain the proportions of
population
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the population
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 in
Australia
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 based on the area they currently reside and their country of birth.
To begin
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 with, the Australian-born are dominating the percentage of people living in
Australia
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 by 73% as shown on the pie chart, outnumbering the population born outside of
Australia
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, which was born in the UK, China, New Zealand, Netherlands and other countries.
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, the table indicates the number of people settled in Cities and remote areas. The cities are populated by 99% of the Chinese-born
while
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 only 1%
living
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live
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 in rural areas.
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, both
chart
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the chart
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 and table show the current demography in
Australia
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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