The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The pie diagram depicts undergraduate anthropology students' activity after they achieve their degree, meanwhile, the table illustrates anthropology graduates income after working for 5 years in 3 different sectors. It can be seen that slightly more than half of graduates got full-time employment,
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, half of the total anthropologists who are employed in the government sector earn more than $100.000. There are six paths of possibilities for what graduates will do after they finish their education. Only 5% of pupils continue their post-grad
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doing some part-time jobs.
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, it shares the same proportions which is slightly less than one-tenth continue their post-grad studies without having
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occupation.
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, in a similar number around 15% of the total are still unemployed and registered as
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. After 5 years of work, a person from the anthropology aspect earns between $25.000 and $100.000. There are 3 different places of work. The biggest proportion of freelance consultants an employee will get $75.000 and above.
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, most government sector employees will have $100.000 and up. The
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, person who works at private companies earns $50.000-74.999 after 5 years of employment.
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