The bar chart below shows the divorce rates of two Europion countries in 5 years(2011-2015).
The bar graph illustrates the divorce rates in Sweden and Finland for five years which is from 2011 to 2015.
Overall
, the rate of divorce in Sweden was the highest in the first four years from
the period given, Change preposition
of
while
Finland took over the place in the last
year
.
On the one hand,Finland started in 2011, it was almost 40% ,and it went down to 2012 suddenly, it increased from 2012 around 30% to 2014 about 40% but from 2014 to the last
year
the rate of divorce did not change much and, it was approximately 40% during the last
period.
On the other hand
, in terms of Sweden increased in the first years which were from 2011 to 2012 and then
, it got decreased significantly from around 50% in 2012 until the last
year
and,it became around 30% in the last
year
which is 2015.Submitted by asomm5563 on
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