write a letter to a organizer of annual festival which is going to organize in your place. Give feedback for last year, mention what you can do and ask some question about festival
On
this
good opportunity, I decided to holding
an Change the verb
hold
event
. Actually, I want to form a team to succes
Correct your spelling
succeed
this
Change preposition
in this
event
on
the Change preposition
at
last
of the year
. I am planning to make
an annual festival at Sanur Garden. I saw the annual festival Verb problem
have
last
year
had succed and got many attention from people to joined the festival in there. If we use that place again for the annual festival this
year
, I hope we can get many
people will join more than Correct quantifier usage
more
last
year
. It makes us to
get many Change the verb form
apply
sponsorship
for Change to a plural noun
sponsorships
this
event
. Furthermore
, for annual
festival Add an article
the annual
this
year
, I am also
planning
add Add the particle
planning to
any
bazaars to join Correct quantifier usage
apply
this
event
. So, we can get more funds for return the
investment. I Change preposition
on the
am
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
want to invite more guests star
Fix the infinitive
to star
on
Change preposition
in
this
event
. This
moment can makes
many people decide to come. I hope we can Change the verb form
make
succes
Correct your spelling
succeed
success
this
annual festival as Change preposition
in this
good
as possible.Change the word
well
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coherence cohesion
The letter lacks a proper structure, such as an introductory greeting, clear paragraphing, and a closing. Ensure that future letters include a formal address to the recipient, paragraphs for each main idea, and a polite ending with a signature.
task achievement
The purpose of the letter isn't clearly conveyed, and the task is only partially achieved. When writing, make sure to state the purpose at the beginning, offer specific feedback on the last festival, suggest your contributions clearly, and end with questions you have about the upcoming festival.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.