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Some people think the public library is necessary, ; however, others believe that the public library is useless. Express your opinion and provide some relevant examples.

The question of whether the public
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 is necessary or useless is simply the
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 that defines how we treat people in general. In my opinion, every
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 is a temple dedicated to human progress and the public
library
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 should in no way be exempted from that rule. I agree that books, in general, are not as popular as they used to be in the past.
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 simply cannot deny the fact that technological progress and mass media effects have changed the way
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people perceive knowledge and where to look for it.
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 the argument that today no
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 even has time to read,
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tonever
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to never
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 mind actually go to the public
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.
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 reason,
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 can argue their practical use in
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 day and age and openly raise
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 question of why
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shouldn`t we turn
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 should be turned into bars, supermarkets or gyms
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, I am confident that the public
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 is more than just a place to go to read something. Even though the time of smartphones and tablets is well upon us, there is something special about going into
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 room full of books, written by the people who have shaped our way of life. Indeed, in each and every city, the public
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 is a symbol of humanity’s relationship with its cultural heritage. It is undoubtedly not just a place where the knowledge is being stored, but rather a sign of our determination to preserve it. In my view, the public
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 is still an absolute necessity in every community.
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, it is not just a building where
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 can find a book, but rather a place of inspiration, peace, and wisdom.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, stating your position unequivocally and summarizing the main points effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Focus on creating a logical paragraph structure, ensuring each paragraph contains one clear main idea and follows logically from the previous one.
Task Achievement
Provide concrete examples to support your main points. This will enhance the persuasiveness of your argument and show the practical implications of your viewpoint.
Task Achievement
Ensure that the response is complete by fully addressing the task prompt. Each part of the prompt should be addressed, with a balanced discussion of each view if the task requires it.
Task Achievement
Present your ideas clearly and comprehensively, with an explanation of how these relate to the topic and the prompt at hand.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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