Some people say free time acitvities for the children should be organized by the parents. Others say that children should be freeto choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and gives your opinion.
It is sometimes argued that
parents
ought to be instructed for kids
spare Change noun form
kids'
kid's
time
activities
through their mature consiousness
and experiences. Correct your spelling
consciousness
While
,
others opinion asserts that Remove the comma
apply
children
should have their responsibility on
choosing what they do in Change preposition
to
leisure
Correct pronoun usage
their leisure
time
freely. I personally outweight the second option letting the children
own their freedom in doing the
free Change the word
their
time
activities
.
On the one hand, it is believe
that Change the verb form
is believed
parents
are always a leader to guide
their Change preposition
in guiding
offsprings
doing the Fix the agreement mistake
offspring
leisure
time
activities
due to
their maturity and high- qualified experience. They foresee and warning
them how useful or dangerous these Wrong verb form
warn
activties
would be. Simultaneously, they will recognize which things will be proper for their age, and Correct your spelling
activities
also
limit and prevent them from playings
games or spending too much Correct your spelling
playing
time
on
watching television. Change preposition
apply
For example
, my friends sometimes observe two her daughter about
choosing the programs Change preposition
apply
as
appropriate ages for kids when they watching cartoons or she will decide Change preposition
apply
the
her little daughter-5 years old must develop drawing talent and she must paint Remove the article
apply
the
pictures Correct article usage
apply
while
her big daughter- 12 years old must good at dancing and she must dance some hard perfomances
. By following and Correct your spelling
performances
performance
organize
the spare Wrong verb form
organising
time
activities
for children
, parents
can avoid them doing wrong acitvites
for them, Correct your spelling
activities
activity
therefore
they do not worry a lot whatever
accidents would Change preposition
about whatever
be happen
to them, Change the verb form
happen
howerver
the Correct your spelling
however
children
should be not happy about doing it.
On the other hand
, I believe that freedom of choices
connects Fix the agreement mistake
choice
chidlren
to develop Correct your spelling
children
as
a natural way and reveal their real talents. Some young people would like to Change preposition
in
swimming
than Wrong verb form
swim rather
drawing
, others would prefer playing musical instruments Wrong verb form
draw
than
dancing whenever they have Change preposition
to
leisure
time
. When they are enjoyable with
doing Wrong verb form
enjoying
this
, gradually, this
activity will become their passion and talent oneday
. Correct your spelling
one day
For instance
, my liitle
sister – 6 years old likes swimming in her spare Correct your spelling
little
time
, now she has got two golden medal
for the school Change to a plural noun
medals
competions
. That Correct your spelling
competitions
competition
just
her favourite thing, and my Add a missing verb
is just
parents
do not prevent her doing
it, Change preposition
from doing
athough
some Correct your spelling
although
though
parents
will not let their children
swim when they are too young. My parents
realized her hobby, supported
and encouraged her Correct word choice
and supported
doing
it. They have never Change the verb form
to do
force
their Change the verb form
forced
chidlren
must do anything as they choose constantly for them. Correct your spelling
children
Parents
should respect their doing
Unnecessary verb
apply
Correct your spelling
activities
activites
, Correct your spelling
activities
encourage
and support them if their Correct word choice
and encourage
children
can develop their mind
and talents
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
minds
although
parents
might be able to having
a right to decide the Change the verb
have
activities
chidren
should act in their free Correct your spelling
children
time
. However
, in my opion
, Correct your spelling
opinion
parents
ought to allowed
kids to Change the verb
allow
whatever
Add a missing verb
do whatever
leisure
time
acitives as
they have a passion for Correct your spelling
activities
it
to develop their talents.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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