The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing?

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5 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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