You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The
map
illustrates differences
between the Correct article usage
the differences
school
in 1985 and in the present day, along with
the number of students
in the school
. In overview, there are many significant changes appearing on the map
and students
increase
from 1,500 Wrong verb form
have increased
students
in 1985 to 2,300 students
now.
Considering the map
in 1985, there was a car park surrounding
by a Wrong verb form
surrounded
road
which was connect
Wrong verb form
connected
the
entrance and the exit of the Change preposition
to the
school
, and end
at the large playing field. There Wrong verb form
ended
was
Change the verb form
were
also
two classroom blocks beside the road
in the school
, which was two-storey at
the right side. Change preposition
on
Moreover
, there was an additional car park beside and a library behind the left classroom. Lastly
, the office was contact
with the main Change preposition
in contact
road
at
the left side of the Change preposition
on
school
.
In the present day, many changes can be seen on the second map
. Firstly
, the road
is only connect
Wrong verb form
connected
the
entrance and the exit, the remaining is cut, and the car park is more round shape than in 1985. Change preposition
to the
Secondly
, some part of the playing fields is replaced by swimming pool, fitness centre and classrooms. Next,
the classrooms at the right side of the school
is
expanded into two blocks, and the storey is increased to three. Change the verb form
are
Lastly
, the library is changed to learning
resources centre and computer room. The office is Correct article usage
a learning
unchange
since 1985.Correct your spelling
unchanged
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, school, students, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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