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The bar chart provides the information about how families in a countries spent weekly income in both 1968 and 2018

The bar chart provides the information about how families in a countries spent weekly income in both 1968 and 2018
The given chart illustrates the percentages of families' weekly expenditures in two different years, 1968 and 2018.
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, as can be seen, food held significance by far in 1968,
whereas
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 in 2018, most were spent on leisure activities. On one hand, food was the major expense in 1968, which was 35% of all. Housing, clothing, and footwear had approximately a tenth of the total in 1968. The remaining five,
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 as general goods, spare time activities, and fuel are similar in data, each is slightly over 5%. In 2018, spare time interests, the largest share, occupied over a fifth of the chart. Food and housing are over 15% whilst the other categories are below.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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