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Two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

Two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.
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The maps illustrate the Denham
town
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’s development from 1986 to the present.
Overall
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,
obviously
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obviously,
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 the
town
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 has
a significant changes
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significant changes
a significant change
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. The most noticeable
in
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is in
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 housing, which
indicate
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indicates
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 a higher population. In 1986,
in
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apply
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the
town
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was
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had
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 fewer
houses
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, but during the next 37
years
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years,
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 the
town
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 witnessed changes.
Firstly
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, the farmland, which
in
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is
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 east of the River Stoke and in the north-east of the
town
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 closed. The big area of
town
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 was covered by farmland.
Secondly
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, there are more
houses
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 along the road.
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Also
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Also,
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 the shops, which
located
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were located
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in
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apply
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north of the post office were replaced by
houses
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. In the
town
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 removed big three gardens and large
house
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houses
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, because
instead
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 of them built a Retirement Home. There was
primary
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a primary
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 school opposite the post office and near to large house and two large
houses
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constructed
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were constructed
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 in front of the primary school.
Furthermore
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, the bridge over the river stoke still stands, as it was.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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