Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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Undoubtedly people’s characteristics are God
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Even some experts have proven that inherited traits are more powerful in developing our personality.
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, I believe that
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is more powerful in
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at different phases of
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than the traits from our ancestors.In
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essay, I will discuss the major impact of
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developing our personality. Manifold reasons to support my viewpoint will be discussed.
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, with
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,we learn varied aspects of
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, we get to know how to survive in
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complicated world.
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, when students go abroad, they
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. In different situations and have many sweet and bitter experiences, which teach them many
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lessons They learn how to communicate and adjust with people of diverse
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and
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in other nations.
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, when we go through any hardship
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life
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,we can know about our strengths and weaknesses and will become great
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.To illustrate,a 23-year blind boy was rejected
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enrollment by IIT and other institutions.He
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took
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decision and his intellectual skills to open his own big firm and became CEO of
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firm.
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,
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also
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us perfect
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particular
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a particular
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field which
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seems impossible to us.
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, when we work as a naïve?? In any
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we perform in inefficient time and some mistakes we make.
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, by practical work, we become more efficient and perform
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frequently which we find very hard in our initial days at
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the workplace
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. In conclusion, it has been proven
experience
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plays
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role in our lifetime.We become more mature and merely more understandable in practical ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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