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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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Undoubtedly people’s characteristics are God
gifted
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Even some experts have proven that inherited traits are more powerful in developing our personality.
However
, I believe that
experience
 is more powerful in
character building
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character-building
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 at different phases of
life
 than the traits from our ancestors.In
this
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experience
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 developing our personality. Manifold reasons to support my viewpoint will be discussed.
Firstly
, with
experience
 ,we learn varied aspects of
life
.
As a result
, we get to know how to survive in
this
 complicated world.
For instance
, when students go abroad, they
encountered
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. In different situations and have many sweet and bitter experiences, which teach them many
life
 lessons They learn how to communicate and adjust with people of diverse
culture
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cultures
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 and
tradition
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traditions
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 in other nations.
Secondly
, when we go through any hardship
of
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life
,we can know about our strengths and weaknesses and will become great
decision maker
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.To illustrate,a 23-year blind boy was rejected
on
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 enrollment by IIT and other institutions.He
then
 took
wise
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 decision and his intellectual skills to open his own big firm and became CEO of
25crore
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 firm.
Finally
,
experience
also
make
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 us perfect
in
particular
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a particular
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 field which
sometime
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 seems impossible to us.
For example
, when we work as a naïve?? In any
sector
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 we perform in inefficient time and some mistakes we make.
However
, by practical work, we become more efficient and perform
task
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tasks
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 frequently which we find very hard in our initial days at
workplace
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the workplace
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. In conclusion, it has been proven
experience
 plays
vital
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a vital
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 role in our lifetime.We become more mature and merely more understandable in practical ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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