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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduated from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course . The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years .

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduated from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course . The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years .
#anthropology #university #course #salaries #anthropologist #work #five #years
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of
graduation
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 Anthropology who
employed
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 after finishing their course ,
while
 the table depicts the income which anthropologists earn after 5 years .
Overall
 , as we can
seen
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, the anthropologists who could find full-time work reached
at
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just over half which
is
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contained the largest segment .
Furthermore
 , as we can see in the table , the
anthropology
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 who worked for
government
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 earned the most salary after 5 years . As regards to
pie
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 chart , the anthropologists who have full-time
job
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 represented 52% ,and
rate
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 of part-time workers which had reached the second highest proportion , represented just over
tenth
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 . The
least
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 segment
is belong
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 to part-time work + postgrad study which represented
to
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5% . We can witness from the table that the sector which gave the highest salary (100,000
dolors
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)
is belong
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 to the government with 50% .
Whereas
 one-third of the employees have a salary over 75000 $ . There are similar
proportion
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proportions
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 of
pupil
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pupils
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 who receive salaries over 25000$ and 50,000$ in both
Freelance
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 and government sectors , which are 5% and 15 % respectively .
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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