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You have been invited to attend an admissions interview for a prestigious college. Unfortunately, you cannot come at the proposed time due to a previous appointment. Write a letter to the admissions tutor and explain your position. In your letter: * Introduce yourself and state your interest in the program * Apologize and offer to come at a different time * Ask how long the interview will be and if you will have to take an exam

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Dear Sir, I am Mustafa and I am writing to inform you of the
interview
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 for applying to your college. Undoubtedly,
this
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 is the best chance for me to live my entire life and
this
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 situation could change the way of my life.
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 I am working in the company and my boss decided to provide me with a higher level of field
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 my colleagues would have a party for me and I have to participate in the party. Unfortunately, the celebration and appointment are on the same days so I have to go to the celebration because it is the
last
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 chance for me to increase the level of my job .
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, I apologize that I could not attend the
interview
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 so I will request to reschedule my appointment for
the
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next week
so
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I hope you understand my situation and postpone the
interview
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 as I will be disappointed to miss that opportunity.
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, I was wondering during the
interview
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 how long is it. If you could tell me the duration of the
interview
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 I can manage my time and I will be prepared for it. Because of my scheduled career, I am available after 6:00 PM. So I can prepare beforehand if you have an exam. I look forward to hearing your response. Your Faithfully, Mustafa

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Grammar
"Your" should be used instead of "You" in the closing ("Yours Faithfully" is the correct phrase, not "Your Faithfully"). Ensure proper use of definite and indefinite articles throughout the letter.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph conveys a clear, single idea and the overall letter follows a logical structure. The second paragraph particularly conflates multiple ideas which detract from the letter's clarity.
Task Response
Focus on directly answering all parts of the prompt. While the letter apologizes and asks about the interview's length, it does not sufficiently explain your interest in the program or clarify your current engagement which is the reason for rescheduling.
Tone
Maintain a formal writing tone appropriate for communicating with an admissions tutor. Avoid informal expressions and ensure a professional level of respect and courtesy in the language used.
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