The graph below shows tge sales of children's books,adult fuction and education books between 2002 and 2006.

The graph below shows tge sales of children's books,adult fuction and education books between 2002 and 2006.
The bar
start
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starts
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provide data about 3 different types
books
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of books
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children
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children's
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book
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books
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adult fiction and educational
books
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book
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sales
over a
5 year
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5-year
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period starting from 2002 .
sales
are measured in
million
dollars
. It can be seen that the amount of children's
books
which were
sale
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sold
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showed an upward trend.
Whereas
the opposite was true for adult fiction . Educational book
sales
showed a fluctuating trend. Looking at the chart in more detail it is evident that 33
million
dollar
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dollars
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in 2002 by 2006 it had significantly increased to 56
million
dollars
which was the highest point on the graph. The educational book increased from 25
million
dollar
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dollars
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in 2002 to 31
million
dollar
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dollars
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in 2003. After
that
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that,
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it
shows
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showed
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an
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downward trend but again rose to 31
million
dollars
in 2006. Turning to the remaining data sets that decreased it can be seen that the
sales
of adult fiction
books
was
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were
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the highest of
two
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the two
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other types of
books
which was 45
million
dollars
.
however
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However
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this
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these
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sales
dramatically dropped to 30
million
dollars
in 2006 which was the highest fell of all the
sales
over the period shown
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, sales, million, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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